First, I would like to pick out some details in Vo's post that could possibly make her argument stronger. For example, though the term "Gun Ban" is obvious of what it spells out, she could have elaborate more on the term such as when did the idea play a major role in the U.S. nation? Who is going to effected by this idea? The law enforcement? The citizens of the U.S.? It's as if your telling a person who has never heard or have no idea what a gun is.
I believe these little and simple questions answered could help understand what the term is and help lengthened your essay. Furthermore, the comment Vo states, "that Democrat" is vague and could be cleared up just a little more. One being there were multiple Democrats mentioned in the article, so a person reading that comment won't exactly know which democrat Vo was talking about talking about.
Finally, instead of stating, "according to this post" Vo could have stated, In an article(embedded link) by Dave Jolly, he states "so on so is for gun control".
In my general opinion , I believe a violent revolution and rebellion would occur almost immediately once the president signs the bill for a gun ban. In the article "What you’ll see in the rebellion", by Bob Owens, he states "Tens of millions of Americans will refuse to comply with an order that is clearly a violation of the explicit intent of the Second Amendment." Moreover, the more guns being stripped away from people, the more activity we could see from the other side of the border. Meaning there could be a higher chance that we could see more guns sneaked in than usual, and possibly a higher rate of crime increased than expected.
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